I think Scottie is trying to do the translation himself first and see if he got it right,
>我今日變得好緊要，又發高燒，又痾又嘔，一啲嘢都唔想食。= Today I dont feel so well (roughly), I have a high temperature, I am vommiting and have diarrhea, and I dont want to eat much.
我(個病)今日變得好緊要，= my (sickness) today turned very serious.
又發高燒，又痾又嘔，having high fever, vomiting and diarrhea,
一啲嘢都唔想食。not wanting to eat anything.
>我今日變得好緊要，又發高燒，又痾又嘔，一啲嘢都唔想食。= Today I dont feel so well (roughly), I have a high temperature, I am vommiting and have diarrhea, and I dont want to eat much.
我(個病)今日變得好緊要，= my (sickness) today turned very serious.
又發高燒，又痾又嘔，having high fever, vomiting and diarrhea,
一啲嘢都唔想食。not wanting to eat anything.